Earlier this month one of my followers, author Ann Carbine Best (IN THE MIRROR), asked how the submission process is going for THE UNDERGROUND GIFT. I started querying my first manuscript this summer, and so far:
- One editor requested a full but declined;
- One agent requested a partial but declined;
- Five agents declined without asking for additional pages;
- One editor requested a full and still has it (fingers crossed!);
- Two editors still have a partial (fingers on other hand crossed); and
- Two agents still have a partial (crossing toes to see if that yields better results).
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"Your query intrigued me, but these sample chapters came across as a light Christmas story, not really reflecting the story you have summarized. However, based on the query, and your quality of writing, I would like to see the full manuscript."
The editor was 100 percent correct; my antagonist, slave catcher Benjamin Michaelson, wasn't getting his evil on soon enough, primarily because at the time I shopped the manuscript I still was a bit shocked about what a sadistic character I'd created.
The result? Michaelson now appears after a word count of 7,664, down by almost 50 percent from the original length, and the initial chapters are much grittier.
This next one came from an agent:
"Thank you for giving me the opportunity to consider THE UNDERGROUND GIFT. You have a compelling and exciting idea, and I enjoyed the many historical details included in your manuscript. Unfortunately, it was a little confusing and the use of the Southern dialect made it a bit hard to follow. Personally, the tone didn't feel YA, and I think young readers would have a hard time relating to the book. I hope that my loss is another agent's gain, and I wish you the best of luck in finding the right home for your work."
Wow, I never thought rejection could make me feel good. As one of my beta readers said, "It's a pretty nice letter as far as they go. At least she gives you some credible reasons. Of course, the real reason is 'I don't think I can make any money on this.' She kind of tells you why. I wouldn't worry about the Southern dialect in the dialogue, but you might have a look at the narrator—make her a modern person, one of our contemporaries, rather than a contemporary of the characters.
"As for the YA comment, I know there's a big debate going on about how intense to make YA fiction. And like she said, it's a personal taste. You can't change that in your novel without making it a completely different novel. So keep it in the mail."
Since this beta reader is a published author whose work I highly respect, I took his advice.
And this from another agent:
"This sounds like a really interesting story. I like that this is character driven and also demonstrates an important part of history. Unfortunately, I didn't connect with it in the way I need to. I really appreciate the opportunity to see your work and am wishing you the best!"
Why do I love this declination? Because, again, it shows the story has promise. Now it's just a matter of actively being patient for that magical connection to happen among me, my book and an agent. After all, not every date results in marriage!
In the meantime, I'm developing a marketing plan for GIFT and enjoying the research phase of my second novel.
And you know what? I've never been happier in my life!

22 comments:
I think it bodes well that you're getting such great feedback, even with rejections. Joining you in the finger crossing!
When rejections at least arrive with some substance, like yours have, it helps so much. Best wishes on your material out and being considered!
@Sarah, thanks for the crossed fingers. :)
@Joanne, I truly realize agents and editors are too time pressed to give feedback, but a form rejection when we're still not confident about our writing careers leaves us wondering was it our query? Our concept? Our writing? What?!
You have lots of exciting news! I hope your journey ends in success for this book. If anything, you're learning a lot from the rejections, and that's what matters.
Well, I think alot of writers have trouble with the idea that their work will not be universally loved (or hated). Sometimes it's mixed. And any time you get a personalized anything, even a rejectiong, is good.
Good luck, Bunny. With hard work and little luck, things go they way they should.
This is so great, Michelle. Thanks for sharing this actual feedback so we can see what agents/editors say and how you can respond to it. I think their comments are very encouraging and bode well for GIFT! You are right - not every date results in a marriage, either of editor/ms or reader/book. That's partly what makes it all work - that there are so many different tastes and opinions in the world :)
@Emily, as my mom always said, nothing learned is ever wasted.
@Tirzah, after spending several years as a news journalist and being called just about every bad name there is, I stopped thinking it's possible to please everyone all of the time. :) And now to quote my husband, everything happens in due time ...
@Susanna, the querying process can feel so mysterious and frustrating, so I thought why not share what we can. And thank you for the wise reminder that different tastes and opinions are what make the world so great!
You have such a terrific attitude! I think that makes a big difference in every aspect of life. I've got my fingers (and toes) crossed for you as well. :D
@CherylAnne, it's all about making the journey as beautiful as the destination, right? :)
Good luck. What I'm seeing is positive. It's a major deal to go from form rejects to personal rejects, to personal rejects that recognize the merit of your writing.
Thanks for sharing your experiences. It's great you've received a number of personalized rejections. As far as rejections go, those are the best kinds.
I haven't read The Underground Gift, but I definitely feel like you've got something. Sooner or later, someone else will see that.
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Good for you, Michelle. Dunno if you have considered it, but you could approach publishers directly - at least the ones who will take unsolicited mss.
I was shocked and saddened the day I found out that no matter how well-written a book is, an agent or publisher won't take it on if they don't think they can make some money off it.
That said, you've gotten some good words on the Gift, so you have no choice but to keep plugging away. Wishing you success!
@Medeia, from a successfully published author like you, this is great feedback; thanks!
@McKenzie, words from the heart like yours are true motivators; thank you, for I am hoping the same for you.
@Joy, even though I wrote GIFT with eyes wide open yet, they were filled with sadness knowing that the type of book I know best how to write isn't the genre that will earn the most money. Still, I believe in the importance of its message and will keep on keeping on, knowing there are agents and editors who still believe in the books like this one--at least I sure hope so!
That's the thing about writing - we write what we love, knowing that it mightn't be the biggest selling genre or that it will be difficult going. It's a story worth being told so keep going. The writers of the classics did despite the odds.
That's wonderful that you're getting so many partial and full requests...def a good sign:)
@Joy, thank you; I really needed to hear that.
@Mark, thank you for the encouragement as well!
All the best for your submission, Michelle. And fingers crossed for good news soon!
@Nas, with someone like you helping to cheer me on, how can I not succeed. :)
At least you've been given some constructive help, Michelle. Keep going - good luck with the next submission!
@Christina, thank you very much for your encouragement; it means a lot!
Congratulations on the great feedback. and keep posting your progress. You are getting closer, Michelle!
@Julia, thanks for the encouragement! How we as authors grow on our journey toward publication can be as exciting as the reaching of our goals.
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